Originals in variation, or Variations of the Original?

What may have played a part in my own major probably goes back to high school. In high school we didn’t have a music problem until me and my friends decided to try our best to get one, we argued with the school, we looked for a teacher who could teach and be willing too. We found a teacher who knew music theory but that was the extent of her knowledge but it sufficed we had a teacher now then we continued to search for instruments, few were obtained through our personal collection and most were found through funding.

What may have played a part in me deciding on a major would go back to high school. In high school we didn't have a music program until my friends and I decided to try out best to get one. We argued with the school for months and finally after a long fight we got our program; just one problem we didn't have a music teacher. We looked or a music teacher who could teach music as well as be willing to although we didn't have to search long, we found a teacher who has some education in music which was just enough to suffice. The final problem was getting instruments, between ourselves we had enough personal equipment but no extras for other possible students.

What I did with this passage was fix some grammer issues and change some run on sentences. I had some basic errors, spell check errors, basic grammer in general, sentences that could form two different and complete sentences.

After teaching all those students I just started thinking of how I would never want to teach music because there just isn’t anyone with the passion until one day my boss at the day care back home I played guitar on my break and kids came and asked me to teach them, I figured they just wanted to be able to play something like me, but I decided to teach them some basics and it was a completely different from trying to teach high school student with no interest, these kids had a genuine interest they really learned what I taught them. After the hours passed these kids could play blues guitar and I felt proud but that didn’t even come close to how great I felt when I heard the kids talking to their moms saying “Mom, I can play guitar now. Trevor taught me.” That is what made me think of a future teaching music.

 

After helping my teacher at the high school I started  thinking of how I would never want to teach music because no one had any passion to learn music in that class; until one day my boss at the local daycare back home said I should teach some kids guitar as an activity. I sat down with my guitar and the kids came up to ask me to teach them, instead of me having to ask if they want to learn. I figured they just wanted to play on one but it made me happy never the less. I decided to teach them basics and unlike the high school students these kids were actually showed a genuine interest and learned what I could teach them. After the hours passed each child could play a little bit of blues which made me feel proud; although that had no comparison to how I felt when the mothers would come pick up their kid and hear them saying "Mom, I can play guitar now. Trevor taught me." That is what made me rethink a future of teaching music.

 

What  I changed here were more basic errors as well as a major error in this passage that didn't make sense at all. I split some sentences and made others more detailed.